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I'd really appreciate it if you could give some love to the other featured pieces and
every morning
and am hauntingly aware
of your heartbeat
it"
The structure of the stanza is incredible, how you've focused the heartbeat at the end, turning it monstrous in a sense just by the simple use of "it" (even Frankenstein's monster, was a "he", you see?)
And then at the end it just disintegrates into obscurity, reference of nothing that even exists, accordingly. Love this a lot.
I enjoyed reading this a lot, the last two lines are very strong and give a strong punch to the sanity