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When I see the names Lizette and Charra,
Beatrix and Teo, I think of girls
with cocoa powder rubbed into their cheeks,
with summer stained on their brow.
I think of hail storms in a dessert and other
unexpected, glorious miracles. I see callused
hands and songs sung in words I can't
understand, but I try so hard to piece them
together in my mind because in a moment,
they'll be gone, and I'll be left here with
only words on a page.
:iconravenwritingclaw:
Day 3 of #Glory-Be-Project
Here, have a poem; I'm not sure how to feed it or what it needs to grow, but maybe you'll have the answers.

Does it flow nicely? Is the topic clear? How is the ending, too short/abrupt?

Enjoy! Comment if you wish.
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Mood: Love ~Pikachuvirus1996 Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very nice peom:)
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~ravenwritingclaw Jan 6, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks you :)
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